Moonlight Mile
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IMDB rating: 6.70 Plot: A young man lingers in the family home of his fiancee, after her accidental death. While grieving along with her parents and drawn into legal issues presented by a district attorney seeking justice for the family, he finds himself falling in love with another woman, against his own best intentions. |
Actors: Gyllenhaal Jake,Hoffman Dustin,Messing Richard,Friedman Lev,Clendenin Bob,Fyfe Jim,Fancy Richard,Corduner Allan,Drama,Romance,
What do you think about this piece of my writing?
I wrote my first novel just a few weeks ago and was wondering what you think about my prologue:
The cloak hid the flaming hair and glowing hawk like eyes, that dark and devious night in late spring. The grey clouds overhead engulfed the moon in the sky, throwing the world into complete darkness everywhere. Despair and fear filled every man’s breast, and a dark ominous feeling lingered in every house, a feeling inexpressible, but all experienced in the back of their soul, like a gripping cold hand which clung with its icy grip inside, never letting go. Burning hot flames reaching as high as the stars above stretched for miles around- the only source of light that shone through the darkness of the night- illuminating the dark cloaked figure, which walked away from the burning village, unflinching and expressionless.
"Stop right there! I know who you are…I won’t let you get away with this kind of
treachery!" a second figure, its silhouette a lot smaller than the cloaked figure,
appeared, as if he had melted out from within the darkness itself, blocking the path of the cloaked figure. The boy, about ten or eleven was shaking, but not from fear.
He had a short crop of dark black hair and wore a tattered brown robe burned from several places. "Wield your sword and fight if you be a man," and the dark haired boy drew his own sword pointing it at the others face.
"But I am not a man," whispered the cloaked person, a cold heartless voice emitting from within the folds of his dark cloak. "Boy", rasped the figure impatiently. "You are driving my patience! Leave me alone…and I might spare your life.."
"Show me some mercy?!" The boy





